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PostSubject: Poetry - Life   Thu Jul 09, 2009 12:36 pm

Life


Living, calling
Constantly falling
Buying, trading
Constantly fading

When words aren’t enough
Kill
Don’t let it control you
Pick up the pill

Have you lived?
Have you lied?
Have you failed?
Have you tried?

I don’t think so


Heroes


Trees fall
With a flash of light
Through the spines of children

An innocent day
A happy day
Turned to rubble

A screech through the night sky
A flash of red
A flash of blue

We can all be heroes
Through and through


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PostSubject: Re: Poetry - Life   Sat Jul 11, 2009 12:31 am

Very very nice!! Did you do that? Hold crap man, that's awesome,. and it's not even too childish!! (No offense intended there, if you were.. Lol..)
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry - Life   Sat Jul 11, 2009 4:54 am

Yeah I made it.

It was my first attempt at poetry.

Thanks for being nice.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry - Life   Mon Jul 13, 2009 8:45 pm

I really like it, one thing you could do though, i'm not sure if this is possible at the moment, it was quite strange reading a poem with different amounts of syllables in each line, try making it more even. But if not it's still awesome

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry - Life   Wed Jul 15, 2009 7:26 pm

Update.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry - Life   Fri Jul 17, 2009 1:37 pm

Very noce Cody, I'm not a biig fan of poetry, but this is good.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry - Life   Sat Jul 18, 2009 9:39 am

Thanks Lemon.

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